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"DESERT GALLEON"
Logline
"A 21st Century soldier of fortune fractures time in a doomed quest for a legendary 16th Century Spanish Treasure Galleon lost in the shifting sands of the Southern California desert."
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Here are reviews from the Bluecat Screenplay competition:
Archive # 12006
Desert Galleon
Reader # 9312
What did you like about this script?
DESERT GALLEON takes the pillars of a classic tale and adds a supernatural twist that actively augments the material and provides a strange, bizarre adventure in the vein of Pirates of the Caribbean and Project Almanac. The premise itself is really what works here. A group of characters, each on separate ships, are first separated, then brought together by time travel, resulting in a story that incorporates both old-fashioned and modern aesthetics. This blend of old and new works extremely well here, considering one of the most difficult sub-genres to tackle is the pirate-adventure genre. But where most stories of this kind fall short, DESERT GALLEON thrives. The writer's knowledge of ships and geography are taken full advantage of, providing us with characters who understand what they are doing in the context of their world, and as a reader, it is extremely enjoyable to indulge in an aesthetically fleshed out story.
The writer also handles the time travel elements really well, never spending too much time on the specifics (overly explained details often times get tiresome) while still providing enough information for us to understand what is going in. The time travel is introduced early enough to have an impact on the setup, but doesn't detract from the interactions between the characters once they meet. Because of this, the script is able to breeze by a very important detail (you could make the argument that the time travel is the crux of the story) without feeling as if something is missing. Similarly, the MacGuffin in the story (the Crystal) is handled properly. It serves as a driving force for the antagonist, but is never portrayed as being more important that any one character.
Archive #716
Desert Galleon
Reader #9354
What did you like about this script?
The writer has a fantastic idea for a story; a Spanish galleon, a time travel adventure, a treasure hunt. Wow! The combination of these story devices is inventive and a journey we certainly want to embark upon. In short, at its core, the writer has the fundamental makings of a great movie.
The writer displays particular prowess when it comes to the technical aspects of the craft -- not just in terms of scriptwriting format, but in speaking and writing around complicated subjects that require specific technical knowledge. The writer has either done a great deal of research, or perhaps has a background in sciences and/or nautical history--either way, the depth of knowledge comes across. This is territory the writer is confident writing about, and we feel that.
The writer has a strong creative voice that displays wittiness and the ability to give scenes just the right touch of humor when needed. One example is the throughline of the soldiers thinking the Sarah character is an angel. Moments like this not only add richness to the story, but ground the reader in what is a fast-paced, quickly moving script that moves around a lot in terms of time and place.
Archive #12075
Desert Galleon
Reader #9389
What did you like about this script?
The writer has strong knowledge of the world they are bringing the audience into through this story. Because they know their story well, the tone of the script remains cohesive and even from beginning to end. One element of the script that helps it come to life is the attention to detail. Paying attention to more than just the characters in a scene adds depth - it feels more full - and is able to capture our attention. A great example of this is when we first get introduced to Ryan and Curtis, and they are instantly attacked. There is a series of shots on pg. 6 that amp up the intensity of this sequence, and the details that come out here create more tension. This moment establishes the pace of the script. It’s a great way to revolve the script around its action, as this is what drives the story forward.
This feature is unique and creative, twisting the tales of the high seas and crossing it over with science-fiction/time travel. This is something that the reader is unsuspecting of and, once it comes around, we are able to buy into immediately. This script has a lot of potential. The scene where the characters discover that they are all from different time periods is a great moment of surprise (pg. 27). The writer is able to build on how different these characters’ lives are from one another, such as when Ryan explains to them what a wristwatch is (pg. 31).
The dialogue is strong and flows naturally. The writer has a keen sense of how their characters converse with one another. This helps them differentiate their personalities and stand out. Again, this shows the writer’s strong knowledge of the time and place of their script.
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